IELTS Writing Task 2 essay with model answer

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic

The mark of a successful person is to be wealthy and have a successful career. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Write at least 250 words.


Model Answer:

There is no denying of the fact that a person’s success is judged by his career and wealth. I totally agree with this statement and will provide numerous reasons to prove the same.

Everyone in this world wants to have a good career path and big bank balance. In this competitive world, everyone is trying to achieve the highest position in an organization. One tries to have a good qualification to get a good job with a handsome salary so that he can fulfill his dreams of being wealthy.  Every business owner is trying to expand and multiply his business to gain more profit, and be known as a successful person. As per the famous magazine India today, Bill Gates and Warren Buffet were named as the most successful person in the world. The reason is that they have immense wealth and extraordinary career. People with such wealth and career are taken as role models because of their success.



When we have wealth we are respected in society and we feel we have achieved something. Growing along the career makes us feel successful. Everyone, in my family, says that my brother is successful he is the Managing Director in his company and is very wealthy. The Cricketers' like Sachin Tendulkar and Ricky ponting are said to be successful because they have achieved the highest limit in their career. Mega Bollywood Star Mr. Amitabh Bachan was treated as the most successful person when he was rising in his career and was receiving awards but was said to be a failure when a downfall started in his career. As the saying goes “Everyone salutes the rising Sun”. Similarly, a person with high wealth and bright career is treated as a successful person.

To conclude, we can say that a successful person is the one who has a great wealth and a marvellous career. Achieving wealth and a good career is the milestone of being successful.

 

Total Words: 331

Task Achievement: 8

Coherence & Cohesion: 8

Lexical resources: 7

Grammar: 7

Overall Score: Band 7.5

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