IELTS Writing Task 2 essay with model answer

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic

Fresh water has always been a limited resource in some parts of the world. Today, however, growing worldwide demand has made this a global problem.

What are the causes of the increased demand and what measure could governments and individuals take to respond to this problem?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Write at least 250 words.

Model Answer:

Since time immemorial, in certain drier parts of the world, fresh water has always been a scarce natural resource. However, in the present time, due to various reasons, scarcity of fresh water has become a global issue. This essay will illustrate some factors contributing to this problem and will also elicit certain steps that can help the national authorities and individuals in controlling this growing demand for natural salt free water.

There are compelling reasons for shortage of fresh water. The main reason is the overpopulation in the metropolitan areas. The global phenomenon of urbanization has lead to the global surge in potable water requirement. Secondly, increased pollution of natural fresh water reserves due to urbanisation and industrialization has compounded this demand. In fact, since the beginning of industrialization, fresh water from rivers and lakes has been increasingly used for manufacturing processes such as chemical reactions, cleaning toxic equipments and so on. Furthermore, in modern times, the growing use of salt free water for activities like recreational swimming, have also catalysed the surge in global water demand. For instance, swimming pools at home, theme parks, and resorts use an avalanche of water. Therefore, water scarcity has risen and is now a global problem.

National authorities, on the other hand, can control this surge by implementing public education schemes regarding controlled water usage. Strict national legislations for preventing natural fresh water reserve pollution are also required. Moreover, government should also set up infrastructure for purification of seawater into saline free water, which will help in meeting the growing requirement of fresh water. A good example is UAE where desalination plants have been used since many years to provide fresh drinking water.

Similarly, public can also contribute towards this noble cause by conserving water and also by limiting their daily household water usage. They should refrain themselves from performing activities that will pollute natural fresh water reserves.

Thus even though, the scarcity of fresh water is a growing global problem, there are various means and methods available, by which both the government and individuals can prevent this from worsening.

Total Words: 373

Task Achievement: 9

Coherence & Cohesion: 9

Lexical resources: 9

Grammar: 9

Overall Score: Band 9

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23 Comments
  1. ramy 1 year ago

    very hard to learn

    • Elshan 12 months ago

      May be for you buddy

  2. Nahida Akther 1 year ago

    Thanks Atul. It’s really useful to get idea for writing.

  3. Kate 1 year ago

    fantastic essay three thumbs up!!

    • Author

      Thanks Kate!
      Hope your preparation for IELTS is going well.
      Let me know if you need any specific help.
      Cheers,
      Atul.

  4. Navi 11 months ago

    Good ideas for the practice. I found it really useful.
    Thanks

  5. Navdeep 10 months ago

    Very helpful for me. I really appreciate it

  6. Liya 9 months ago

    It doesn’t need any explanation of points

  7. PINKESH PARMAR 7 months ago

    is it okay to state what the essay is all about in first paragraph?

    • Author
      IELTS Online Practice 7 months ago

      Dear Pinkesh,

      Yes, it is best to paraphrase the topic and state what the essay is about in the intro paragraph.

      Cheers,
      Atul.

  8. Meet 6 months ago

    Very nicely organised,pharaphrased,varitey of vocabulary used .

    • Author
      IELTS Online Practice 6 months ago

      Dear Meet,

      I’m glad you found it useful. If you need any help with your IELTS preparation ,let me know.

      Good Luck!

      Cheers,
      Atul.

  9. Elmira 6 months ago

    Dear Atul,

    Thanks for putting this up. If it’s not a lot to ask, could you please check my essays? I have my general ielts in less than a month and I need to get ready.

    I really appreciate your help.
    Elmira

    • Author
      IELTS Online Practice 6 months ago

      Dear Elmira,

      Happy to help you out. Send me an essay on the following topic and I’ll mark it for free.

      Some people think that the government should pay one of the parents of very young children to stay at home to look after their children.
      What do you think would be the advantages and disadvantages of this policy?
      Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
      Write at least 250 word.

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      Cheers,
      Atul

  10. Sanjiv kumar 6 months ago

    Very nice job

    • Author
      IELTS Online Practice 6 months ago

      Thanks Sanjiv,

      I’m glad you found it useful.

      If you need any specific help with your IELTS prep, feel free to reach out.

      Good luck!

      Cheers,
      Atul.

  11. Anonymous 6 months ago

    Very well written, really helpful. Great Job Atul! Thanks.

  12. Preet 5 months ago

    Hello, it’s really helpful for preparing nine band essay as I’m aspiring for the same but I’m facing difficulty in getting feedback as I have no-one who can check and tell me what do I need to improve more. Is there any way that I can get my essays checked?

  13. Annisa Butt 1 month ago

    The essay above gives several points per paragraph that are neither explained, expanded on nor supported. The answer appears to give one single point and then moves onto the next one. However, writing tips from examiners always stress expanding on a single idea in order to acheive 7.5 and above.

    I do not understand how this essay fulfills the requirements for a band 9 score, can you please explain.

    • Author

      Dear Annisa,

      You are absolutely correct. You should extend and support each argument with supporting arguments or examples.

      After reading the essay again, I felt that this student’s essay lacked in that respect. I have expanded some of the main arguments with examples.

      Thanks for bringing it to my notice.

      Regards,
      Atul.

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