IELTS Writing Task 2 essay with model answer

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic

International tourism has brought enormous benefit to many places. At the same time, there is concern about its impact on local inhabitants and the environment.

Do the disadvantages of international tourism outweigh the advantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.


Write at least 250 words.

Model Answer:

Travel industry has experienced a major boom in the later part of the 20th century and has been a blessing in disguise, which has helped some weaker nations to uplift their failing economies. While questions have been raised regarding the negative impacts that accompany the growth in the travel sector, these definitely do not outweigh the associated benefits.



The economic boost that accompanies a successful travel industry is quite well recognised and Thailand is the best example. The entire Thai economy revolves around tourism and the country had been able to uplift its socio economic status through its flourishing hospitality sector.  Egypt is another nation that is heavily dependent on its hospitality sector. The growth in the number of incoming tourists leads to innumerable prospects in terms of local entrepreneurship & employment generation. This is also associated with international investments and infrastructure development. The national authorities, in order to ensure safety of the international visitors provide better law and order enforcement, improved transportation and healthcare facilities, which in turn benefit the local population.

On the other hand, the rising influx of holidaymakers is associated with increased incidences of crimes, prostitution and antisocial activities like drugs, human trafficking and gambling, which affect the values of the indigenous society. The local population are also affected by the growth in property value indices. Environmentalists are also concerned regarding environmental remodelling, that is associated with increased tourist activities in natural reserves. In this context, it is worth mentioning that, by enforcing stern law and order and implementing strict legislations, governments can control most of these negative impacts of tourism.

Henceforth, it can be confidently conveyed that, even though the growth in travel industry has accompanying negative social impacts, these do not outweigh the contributions made by this sector towards social development.

Total Words: 296

Task Achievement: 9

Coherence & Cohesion: 9

Lexical resources: 9

Grammar: 9

Overall Score: Band 9

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Model Answer (Band 8):

There is no doubt that international tourists have brought a lot of positive impact to many countries. However, these benefits also come with many negative issues. Personally, I feel that international tourism has resulted more advantages than disadvantages to the affected nations in general. In this essay, I will examine both the benefits and their related cost and support my opinion accordingly.

First of all, many people argue that many local inhabitants have been sacrificed in order to make way for the development of tourist attractions. For examples, tress were cut down so that hotels can be constructed; old heritage sites were demolished and replaced by new shopping malls; local residence, especially the aboriginals, have to be relocated so that their land can be used for new airport. However, people tend to ignore the economics and social benefits brought upon by these developments. For example, the number of jobs created by the constructions of hotels and shopping malls could stimulate the economic growth of a nation and benefit the both the people and the nation as a whole.   

Secondly, many people also claimed that the influx of foreign tourists will increase the social problems such as crime rates immoral activities.  For examples, they claimed that tourists usually like to visit pubs and clubs in the evening and that will lead to higher rate of alcohol related problems such as noise pollution, vandalism and prostitution. However, I believe that the millions of foreign dollars brought in by these tourists could actually decrease the problems if the  money are put into proper used by the government. For example, the tax collected from the entertainment outlet could be used to help combat crime and actually make the country a safer place.

In conclusion, I believe that if we look at the overall picture of international tourism when doing the cost-benefit analysis, we will see that they are more advantages than disadvantages.  

Total Words: 318

Task Achievement: 8

Coherence & Cohesion: 8

Lexical resources: 8

Grammar: 8

Overall Score: Band 8

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  1. aa 6 years ago

    Okka

  2. marshall 6 years ago

    what type of essay is this?
    what I mean to say is, Is it advantage amd disadvantage essay or two part essay?

  3. Author
    IELTS Online Practice 6 years ago

    This would fall under “advantage / disadvantage essay”. You will need to discuss both and then come to a conclusion if one outweighs the other.

    Hope this helps.

  4. aatika patel 6 years ago

    excellent essay..

  5. Anonymous 6 years ago

    Excellent

  6. Anonymous 6 years ago

    Perfect essay. Keep it up!

  7. pragnesh patel 6 years ago

    hi in writing task 1 which paragraph i write overall paragraph

    in writing task 2 how examiner check please help me

  8. Author
    IELTS Online Practice 6 years ago

    Dear Pragnesh,

    For Academic Writing Task1, you can write the overview in your introduction. Alternatively, it is also fine to write the overview at the end.

    If you write the overview in the intro, then start with the phrase “Overall, …” ; when you write it at the end start with “In summary, ….”

    Finally, if you have written the overview in the intro then do not repeat it again in the summary, and vice versa.

    Go over this tutorial to learn more about writing overview: https://ieltsonlinepractice.com/topic/write-introduction-overview/

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  9. Sanjeev 6 years ago

    Outstanding essay

  10. Author
    IELTS Online Practice 6 years ago

    Thanks for the kind words Sanjeev!

    Good luck with your IELTS preparation.

  11. Himanshu Gupta 5 years ago

    It seems to be that there were grammatical errors in the essay. Specifically –

    On the other hand, the rising influx of holidaymakers is associated with increased incidences of crimes, prostitution and antisocial activities like drugs, human trafficking and gambling, which affect the values of the indigenous society.

    Drugs are not antisocial? The ‘usage’ of illegal substances/drugs are; Prostitution is not a crime unless legalized and the sentence does not indicate if you consider it a crime? Human trafficking is definitely a crime and again your sentence does not indicate if you consider it a criminal behaviour? Infact your sentence indicates that you consider human trafficking to be antisocial (and not a crime)? Same for gambling.

    I would have said:

    “…..increased incidences of criminal behaviour, such as prostitution and human trafficking, and antisocial activities, such as gambling and the use of illegal drugs….”

    Am i correct?

  12. Author
    IELTS Online Practice 5 years ago

    Hi Himanshu,

    Thanks for the suggestion. You are absolutely correct. The original sentence was a bit confusing. I have replace it with your version.

    Cheers,
    Atul.

  13. Anonymous 5 years ago

    nice advice

  14. surbhi 5 years ago

    sir i want to achieve only 6 in writing module .but I only get 5.5 in real exam in writing … plzzzz tell me what should I do

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  16. Sana 4 years ago

    What is boon in disguise? I always read blessing in disguise.

    Can you please give some clarity?

  17. Diyor 4 years ago

    A blessing in disguise
    It’s an idiom
    We can’t use them in writing.

  18. Author
    IELTS Online Practice 4 years ago

    Dear Diyor,

    There is no restriction on using idioms and phrases in essays. IELTS essays are not like the academic essays that you write in university level courses.

    It is fine to use an idiom or phrase if the context is appropriate. However, don’t overdo it by using too many idioms.

    Hope this helps.

    Cheers,
    Atul.

  19. Tobin 4 years ago

    Please check my essay

    Many cities are replacing cars with bicycles. What are the reasons for this? Which do you think is better?
    As my point of view , I can not support its totally. Some areas exchange’s of car is bicycle .While reducing car ,air pollution and sound pollution can also control up-to some extend . Whereas both cycle and cars are a essential part of our daily life
    While car are very helpful during hot climate as well as rainy seasons .We can travel together with families in car ;if we have emergency case like hospital cases,airport ; cars are very useful in these time ,also we can carry lagges .The negative side of cars are the daily increase of petrol price ,where as difficult to do parking in town areas

    – [ ] Since bicycle are good for health. It’s a healthy excises if we do it’s in daily life .We need just rotate the pedal with our foot step to ride the bicycle.Here we can gain petrol cash ,sound and air pollution some of the demerits are we can not travel more than 2 people in a bicycle ,as well as we can not useful at emergency cases
    To conclude that both car and bicycle are a important to our daily life .They have their on importance depends upon situation that occur

  20. Author
    IELTS Online Practice 4 years ago

    Hi Tobin,

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    Regards,
    Atul.

  21. Harsh 3 years ago

    The haven’t ask the opinion or your view so is it correct to write “personally” or “I” in the sample writing of 8 band ?

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