IELTS Writing Task 2 essay with model answer

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic

Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school.

Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.


Write at least 250 words.

Model Answer:

In recent years, many parents love to send their kids for foreign language classes at a young age. However, some people have claimed that it is more effective if the children start learning a second language when they are in the secondary school. In this essay, I will examine the pros and cons of learning a new language at the early stage of schooling life.



There is no doubt that our ability to learn a language is at its prime when we were young. Without having to worry about anything, primary school goers have a tendency to acquire new knowledge easily. For example, most children in Malaysia have to learn 3 different languages, Malay, Chinese and English, during their primary education and almost all of them can comprehend in these three languages before they become a teenager.

However, forcing children to learn many different languages has its drawbacks too. We have to take into consideration that the elementary education nowadays requires students to study many subjects such as mathematics, science, history and geography. Adding another subject to their busy schedule may create unnecessary pressure. For example, I have seen kids run into depression because they were unable to handle their overloaded school works. It is extremely important for kids to grow up in a stress free learning environment. Moreover, letting children to start learning a foreign language while they are in their secondary education also enable them to choose the language of their interest.

In conclusion, I feel that it is better to let the children start learning a foreign language when they are in their teens. This will ensure that they enjoy a healthy childhood learning environment which is beneficial to them in the long run.

Total Words: 272

Task Achievement: 8

Coherence & Cohesion: 8

Lexical resources: 8

Grammar: 8

Overall Score: Band 8

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  1. Anonymous 7 years ago

    Ooooo really, very good essay… I donot evaluate this essay

  2. Ali4j 7 years ago

    Hi
    I believe that the first body paragraph has to talk about the “advantages” of learning foreign language in elementary school not the “reasons” why elementary school should be preferred over secondary school.
    please correct me if I’m wrong.

    best reagards

  3. Author
    IELTS Online Practice 7 years ago

    Hi Ali4j,

    Aren’t both the same thing? … i.e. the “advantages” are the “reasons” why primary school should be preferred over secondary school.

    How would you rewrite the paragraph to make it better?

    Atul.

  4. Anonymous 6 years ago

    Yss, i agree

  5. Anonymous 6 years ago

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  6. Mallika Dahal 6 years ago

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  7. Kkunal 6 years ago

    Sir my exam is on 29 September..
    can you help me to get 7 band in writing

  8. Author
    IELTS Online Practice 6 years ago

    Hi Kkunal,

    I’ve emailed you.

    Cheers,
    Atul.

  9. Anonymous 6 years ago

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  10. Anonymous 6 years ago

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  11. Author
    IELTS Online Practice 6 years ago

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  12. Author
    IELTS Online Practice 6 years ago

    I’m glad you are finding the essays useful.

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  13. KT 5 years ago

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  14. Author
    IELTS Online Practice 5 years ago

    Dear KT,

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    Cheers,
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  15. Shagun 5 years ago

    Hello Sir
    Am finding your essays really helpful.
    My exam is on 12 October, I would be glad if u could suggest me certain topics on which I should prepare for the same.
    Thanks in advance

  16. Shagun 5 years ago

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  17. Author
    IELTS Online Practice 5 years ago

    Dear Shagun,
    Thanks for the positive feedback.
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  19. Farangiz 4 years ago

    Hi??? Mr. My exam is on 2nd July can u help me with my writing task
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  20. Author
    IELTS Online Practice 4 years ago

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    Cheers,
    Atul.

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