IELTS Writing Task 2 essay with model answer

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic

The most important thing about a job is how much money you earn. Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Write at least 250 words.


Model Answer:

There are many factors a worker must consider when choosing a job. One key factor is the remuneration. While some consider the highest paying jobs to be the most significant factor in choosing a job, I strongly disagree with this viewpoint.

Firstly, the sense of achievement experienced by many people in their vacation does not have a monetary value attached to it. There are a number of people who choose their employment by job satisfaction they gain. One such example is that of nurses. Nurses are required to work in irregular shift patterns; their salary is often below the minimum wages in many countries and the job is emotionally demanding as well. I recently asked a midwife how she coped with the challenges of her work. Her response was, "When you know you have saved someone's life, you have a satisfying feeling." If money was the most important factor in a job, we would not have nurses.



Conversely, some of the professions with the highest - paid salaries have the highest suicide rates. One such example is that of investment bankers. In the city of London, the financial district in the U.K, there is a renowned restaurant near Bank street station. Every year, there is at least one reports of a financial service worker jumping to his death from this restaurant. If money was the most vital aspect of a persons work, Surely the suicide rates amongst the highest earners would not be so high.

Having considered a range of factor, I strongly oppose the view set out in the essay title. There are numerous factors that give value to a line of work. Some of these outweigh the financial rewards of the job. Furthermos, the stress associated some of the highest paid jobs can often come as a side effect. There must be a balance between a range of factors. Thus although money is important; it is not the most important factor.

 

Total Words: 280

Task Achievement: 7

Coherence & Cohesion: 7

Lexical resources: 7

Grammar: 7

Overall Score: Band 7

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