IELTS Writing Task 2 essay with model answer

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic

The percentage of overweight children in western society has increased by almost 20% in the last ten years. Discuss the causes and effects of this disturbing trend.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Write at least 250 words.

Model Answer:

The rise in obesity has been significant amongst the youth all over the world particularly in the UK, United States and Australia, While some people consider this to be the result of poor self control, I feel the causes are linked to lifestyle that people lead in the western society. If this issue is not tackled there will be many detrimental effects on healthcare systems in these countries.

There are many causes of rapid growth in childhood obesity in the western world. Firstly, there are many powerful companies behind the advertising of high calorie snacks and foods. These companies drive strong promotional campaigns, inducing the youth to purchase these foods. An example of this is McDonald's, McDonald's entices the youth by various ways, such as sponsoring sports, creating "Happy Meals" containing toys and, creating play areas in their restaurants. As a results, young children may ask their parents to take them to McDonald's.

Another reason for the increased consumption of high calorie foods is the fast pace of life in these more economically developed countries. Many parents work long hours; as a result they have little time to cook nutritious meals for their children. Thus, fast food outlets have become quick and easy alternative to cooking.

The effects of growing of phenomenon obesity in the youth include a number of health problems. Heart disease, diabetes and strokes can all be linked to high body mass index. If a society has a greater incidence of diseases, this will take a ton on the health system and ultimately decrease the life expectancy of people and the quality of life that they lead.

In summary, if the obesity epidemic is not tackled at the grassroot level, we will become a population with many morbidities. It may be the end of the western world as we know it.

 

Total Words: 300

Task Achievement: 8

Coherence & Cohesion: 8

Lexical resources: 7

Grammar: 7

Overall Score: Band 7.5

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