IELTS Writing Task 2 essay with model answer

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic

Topic: Parent Child Freedom

Some people think that parents should give their children complete freedom. Others feel that parents should limit their children's freedom.

Discuss both views and give your opinion.


Write at least 250 words.

Model Answer:

Every parent has his own way of raising a child. While some believe in complete freedom, others are of the opinion that it should be restricted. This essay will shed some light on both views before reaching a reasoned conclusion.



Many parents advocate giving their offspring’s complete freedom. This is because they believe that otherwise the child will feel suffocated and thus will not grow up in an environment conducive to his development. For instance, by not restricting a youngster's choice, he will be free to make his own decisions and feel fulfilled and content. However, I would side with the belief that unbridled parenting can result in a child going astray. By not having an authority figure, a child can grow up being disrespectful to others.

On the other hand, some parents limit their children's freedom for some obvious reasons. One of which being that the children may not be mature enough to make good reasoned decisions. Many youngsters, for example, are easily influenced by peer pressure into trying dangerous activities such as drugs and smoking. Needless to say, that it is more advisable for parents to counsel their children and also give them the opportunity to make their own choices. As a result, this would strengthen the parent-child bond and give the child enough space to experience life.

In conclusion, I believe that unbridled parenting, can be detrimental to the child and at such a young age, parental supervision is crucial for his development.

Total Words: 255

Task Achievement: 8

Coherence & Cohesion: 8

Lexical resources: 8

Grammar: 8

Overall Score: Band 8

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  1. Prakash 5 years ago

    Thank you for posting, it’s a very useful for learning.

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    IELTS Online Practice 5 years ago

    Dear Prakash,

    I’m glad you found the essay useful.

    If you need any specific help with your IELTS preparation, feel free to get in touch.

    Cheers,
    Atul.

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