IELTS Writing Task 2 essay with model answer

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic

Some employers want to be able to contact their staff at all times, even on holidays.
Does this development have more advantage than disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Write at least 250 words.


Model Answer:

Since decades ago/ For decades, holidays have become more like busman's holiday as bosses want to be in constant touch with their staffs even if the staff is on a vacation. In this essay, I am going to discuss the advantages and disadvantages of such practice.

To begin with, it can be easily seen that employees' accessibility plays an influential role in maintaining smooth business. nowadays customers have very strict deadlines, thus employers who are in constant contact with their employees and working against the clock can easily meet those deadlines to see their customers grinning from ear to ear. It is also possible to say that instead of waiting for the employee to return from holiday, the employer can contact him urgently to complete the task beforehand without wasting any precious time. For instance, in multi national companies, employers keep their customers on cloud nine by providing free monthly internet and mobile balance to their employee so that they can reach each other to accomplish any urgent tasks.



However, every coin has two sides and despite all the advantages of such development, there are some disadvantages too. Firstly, despite being on holiday, employees will have the feeling of being haunted by the employer; consequently, they may develop negativity against their boss. Secondly, people take off time to get themselves relieved from day to day stress; however, constant calling to them may work against it. To exemplify, people go to vacation alone or with family to have fun or to tear down the burden from their mind; thus contacting incessantly to them may spoil their trip.

To sum up, in my opinion, both arguments have their merits. On balance, however, I tend to believe that employees should be left alone after office hours so that they can relax and enjoy their time alone or with their family.

Total Words: 286

Task Achievement: 8

Coherence & Cohesion: 8

Lexical resources: 8

Grammar: 8

Overall Score: Band 8

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4 Comments

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  1. Victor 6 years ago

    Hi,

    Isn’t this essay asking you for your opinion? (Does this development), which mean you need to state your opinion clearly and justify with details in the body.

    Instead, you’ve discussed both sides and gave your opinion I believe TA is not complete.

  2. Logan 6 years ago

    Hi,

    I’m here to sort out your misunderstanding of this essay. Firstly, if details are necessary the question itself will tell you to add relevant details to your answer, which you cannot find in any part of the question. You are right about saying that the essay requires your opinion. However, the main focus of the question happens to be whether the development has more advantages than disadvantages (or converse), and not just an opinion. The body gives one point each to advantage and disadvantage of the development, and by the flow we can understand that there is no more advantage or disadvantage than each other. Therefore the conclusion being that this development has the balance between the two is absolutely reasonable, covering the main focus of the question and coherent with the body. There are no errors in grammar and vocabulary in the essay, but i do think that more advanced words are required for the lexical resources score to be as such. I believe this essay should be in band 8~8.5. Nevertheless, your complaint to this essay was a shame. If you read the question and essay a bit more sharply you wouldn’t have made such unfortunate criticism.

    Hope this gave you a better understanding on this question and essay.

  3. Logan 6 years ago

    The above comment was written for Victor :)

  4. Sultan 4 years ago

    Hey Logan, I am convinced from your comment that you have a better understanding towards IELTS WRITING TASK 2. However, it is not a shame if anyone asks regarding anything in comments. If you feel so than don’t answer anybody.

    This comment is specially for Logan.

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