IELTS Writing Task 2 with model answer

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic

Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Write at least 250 words.


Model Answer:

Accomplished sportsmen are highly paid professionals. More so  than many  from other important aspects of life.A section of society opines that such high compensation is at par with market expectations while others beg to differ.Ours being a consumer driven society, I strongly agree that high remuneration for successful sportsmen is completely justified and over the course of this essay will discuss both viewpoints.

Sport is a form of entertainment and sportsmen are its heroes. Therefore society decides the price based on the popularity of a sport.First of all, successful sportsmen through their skills bring excitement and thrill to our mundane lives.For example, Indian Premier League cricket brings lot of entertainment to general public.Consequently, society is willing to pay a price to see cricketing great Virat Kohli perform well in the field. It is a win-win situation for all. Secondly, tremendous amount of hard work, dedication and personal sacrifice make a professional sportsman. Therefore efforts put in by sportsmen is by no means lesser than efforts put in by professionals in other important fields and deserve a fat paycheck.

On the other hand, naysayers argue that people in many important professions are paid less.For example, policemen and army men protect and serve our country.It is because of them, society is able to enjoy a great game of cricket played by the likes of Virat Kohli. In return, such policemen and army men are often poorly compensated.

Having considered a range of arguments, I have drawn the conclusion that, in a consumer driven market, whatever sells well, pays well. Therefore high remuneration of successful sportsmen is completely justified.

Total Words: 264



Task Achievement: 8

Coherence & Cohesion: 8

Lexical resources: 8

Grammar: 8

Overall Score: Band 8

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2 Comments
  1. Patel Meet 1 year ago

    Nice and relevent ans

  2. Stephenie Sonia 6 months ago

    Please critique mine

    Nowadays,it is observed that successful athletes gain more salary in the society than people in other professions.some individuals argue that it is improper for sports professionals to earn larger money than other professionals,such as medical personnels,because such profession perform some important roles in their lives.This essay will argue on both views and my opinion stated.

    Although,sports is crucial in the lives of the people,other activities,such as health information are also essential.Medical personnels play an important role in the health of an individual by providing information that help in the promotion of good health.However,health is one of the physiologic needs and it needs to be improved,therefore health professionals should be paid higher than sports professionals.For instance,it is researched that medical personnels have the highest work load in the history because they do everything possible to ensure healthy lives.If there are no medical professionals in the world today,there will be recorded increased mortality rate per day.

    On the contrary,games,such as Olympic Games,improve awareness of sports thereby creating awareness of different sports.Sports,although help in the build up of the cells in the body,does not necessarily require higher salary to be paid to the professionals.This is because any individual can perform any exercise or sports of his choice.It is actually unfair and unjust for sports professionals to gain more money than other professionals because they do not add any benefits to one’s life.

    Above all,other crucial professionals,such as Doctors,should earn more money than athletes because they perform more work in order to promote good health unlike the sports professionals.Moreover,these medical personnels render medical aids to these sports professionals in the field whereas the athletes do not perform any role in the lives of the society and the nation at large.

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