IELTS Writing Task 2 essay with model answer

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic

Some people argue that technological inventions, such as mobile phones, are making people socially less interactive. Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Write at least 250 words.


Model Answer:

Humans invent things to make their social life more comfortable; , however, these technologies such as mobile phones have adverse effects too. I strongly agree with the latter view due to several reasons that I will discuss in greater detail in my essay.

To begin with, mobile phones have made communication faster and cheaper, thus one can easily reach their dear ones who are living in any part on the earth. It is also possible to say , as mobiles are becoming more smarter , people can share their special memories through social networks. To exemplify, nowadays people seamlessly share their personal messages, photos, documents on Facebook and WhatsApp easily through smartphones.



It goes without saying that mobiles have adverse effects too on the society. Children have become less active and contain themselves within the walls and play mobile games, consequently, they have fewer friends. Adults too have become socially inactive as they are well occupied in chit-chat with their buddies on social networking sites. Earlier people used to come out of their homes at night within society compounds for the get-together; however, such scenarios are less visible nowadays. Parents are too busy with their mobiles that they often forget to spend valuable time with their children; , thus,  children feel isolated which affects their mindset too.

After having discussed the most pertinent points, I feel that the only logical conclusion is that while the invention of mobiles has provided more comfort to the society, it has broadened the social gap between people and given rise to the feeling of isolation among people.

 

Total Words: 253

Task Achievement: 8

Coherence & Cohesion: 8

Lexical resources: 7

Grammar: 8

Overall Score: Band 7.5

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5 Comments

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  1. Anonymous 6 years ago

    Write in simple language please which is understand by school students

  2. Anonymous 6 years ago

    This language is professional language for professional course i.e., IELTS

  3. Richa 5 years ago

    The essay demands do you agree or disagree, here the stance stated are elucidating both views which is contradicting the question.

  4. Anonymous 4 years ago

    This is my doubt also

  5. Anonymous 3 years ago

    There are few grammar errors in the model answer above. I think the language is basic too.

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