IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer: Negative impacts of playing computer games and what can be done (Band 9)

IELTS Writing Task 2 essay with model answer

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic

Nowadays many people have access to computers on a wide basis and a large number of children play computer games.

What are the negative impacts of playing computer games and what can be done to minimize the bad effects?.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Write at least 250 words.

Model Answer:

A healthy body is a healthy mind. Cycling has many potential benefits to people’s physical and psychological health. However, the use of bicycles by the people as a mode of commute is decreasing due to many reasons. Some of the possible solutions to encourage people to use bikes have been discussed below.

The potential factors that reduce the usage of bikes in a cosmopolitan city like Melbourne are the following. Firstly, increase in population is directly proportional to rise in traffic congestion, which results in bumper to bumper traffic. In such cases, cyclists may find it hazardous to ride on these roads. Secondly, there are not enough bicycle lanes for a safe journey during peak hours of traffic. Thirdly, due to the busy schedule and fast paced life people are not choosing bikes. As riding a bicycle to work may need a shower or change of formal clothes. Finally, people are not sufficiently conscious of adverse effects to the environment when cars fuelled by fossil fuels are used. Thus, proving us that bikes have become the last option as a means of transport for people.

People can be encouraged to ride bikes by constructing exclusive bike lanes for safe riding. Besides bike lanes, the people who drive cars should be aware of bike users when driving. Additionally, the government and the workplace should conduct campaigns to create awareness among the people about using bikes. For instance, they could offer free bike parking facility near offices and public transports. This would conserve the environment as well as enhance physical fitness of the citizens. They should also stress the importance of the well-being of employees and individuals. Hence, the government should motivate the people who chose to live environmentally responsible lives by offering them incentives.

In conclusion, the government and the employer could play a prominent role, in getting people back to choose bikes to travel. Cyclists should be made to feel comfortable and safe, which is in the hands of the government and the community.

 

Total Words: 309

Task Achievement: 9

Coherence & Cohesion: 9

Lexical resources: 9

Grammar: 9

Overall Score: Band 9

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